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The chart below shows the number of men and women (in thousand) in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

The chart below shows the number of men and women (in thousand) in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.
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number
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 of
men
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 and
women
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 participating in
further
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education
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 in
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Britain
 during three different academic periods: 1970/71, 1980/81 and 1990/91. The data is categorized by gender and whether students were enrolled in full-
time
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 or part-
time
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education
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.
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, more
men
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 than
women
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 attended part-
time
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education
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 in three periods,
while
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 the
number
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 of
women
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 in full-
time
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education
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 increased over
time
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. Meanwhile, the
number
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 of
men
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 in full-
time
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education
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 remained relatively stable. In 1970/71, around 1000
men
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 were enrolled in part-
time
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education
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, significantly outnumbering the approximately 700
women
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. Over the next two decades, the
number
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 of male part-
time
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 students declined slightly,
whereas
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 female participation gradually increased, reaching nearly 1100 by 1990/91.
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full
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full-time
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time
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education
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, in 1970-71, both
men
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 and
women
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 had relatively low enrollment numbers, with
men
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 slightly outnumbering
women
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.
However
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, by 1990/91, the
number
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 of
women
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 in
full
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full-time
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time
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education
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 had risen sharply to around 200 surpassing the
number
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 of
men
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, which remained fairly stable. In conclusion,
while
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part-timr
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part-time
education
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consisrenly
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consistently
 more popular than
full
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full-time
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time
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education
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 for both genders, there was a notable rise in the
number
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 of
women
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 pursuing higher
education
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 over
time
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,
perticularly
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particularly
 in full-
time
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 courses.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, men, women, education, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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