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Band 1.5

The plans below shows the village of Pebbleton twenty years ago and now.

The two maps show changes made to
Pebbleton
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 before 20 years.
Overall
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,
while
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 the western part of
the
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Pebbleton
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undergane
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underwent
 significant development, with the new modernization of existing ones, the Eastern
side
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the
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Pebbleton
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 remains unchanged. Before 20 years the village had a few places,houses and
lighthouse
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a lighthouse
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 on the north
side
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,
old
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an old
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 fort and
film
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a film
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 studio on the west
side
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.The school
located
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is located
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 between
cost road
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Cost Road
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 and
river
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the river
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 on the
soutern
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southern
side
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.Old fort
round
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around
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eastern
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the eastern
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 part of the village
Pebbleton
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 stained the same. Currently the western of the village
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Pebbleton
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of Pebbleton
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 have
also
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 been changed.
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,added new facilities,
northern
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the northern
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 part of the
Pebbleton
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 children’s playground was built
instead
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 of
old
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the old
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 fort and lighthouse unchanged.The number of houses has doubled,
community
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a community
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 centre added on the west
side
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 flat
instead
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 of
film
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a film
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 studio the Southern and east sides stained the same.

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coherence
Make sure to clearly differentiate between the features of the maps in your text. Use clearer transitions to indicate changes between the past and present.
positive
The essay shows a good attempt to describe the main features of the maps and draw comparisons.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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