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The first chart below, shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kind of tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring, and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

The first chart below, shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kind of tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring, and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.
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 essay, will
shows
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show
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 the difference
of
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between
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males
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 and
females
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 doing the housework. The part of the housework, that
males
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 more do is cooking
as
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with
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 the same
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females
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,
males
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 spend 60
minutes
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 and
females
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 70
minutes
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. In cleaning
males
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 invest 40
minutes
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 per day and
females
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 almost 70
minutes
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this
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 is a big
diference
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difference
. At the part of pet care
males
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 have more than 20 and
females
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 less than 20
this
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 is the second thing, that
males
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 do more than
females
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, the first is house repairs men invest almost 20
minutes
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 and
females
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 less than 10. In
conclution
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conclusion
 is very divided the tasks of the house
between
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are between
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 boys and girls and
this
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 is how
the
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society works.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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