The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care their children in the evening in 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care their children in the evening in 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph displays the proportion of how
fathers
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,
mothers
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, and
both
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parents
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together in a specific nation spent
time
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taking care of their minors
for
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by
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dressing,
homework
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doing homework
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, playing games, and preparing for bed in the evening in 2022.
Overall
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,
fathers
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alone had the lowest rate of spending
time
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with children.
Both
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parents
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together prepared for bed and
playing
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played
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games more than doing other activities,
while
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mothers
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spent more
time
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alone
for
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apply
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dressing and
homework
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doing homework
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. Compared to other tasks,
mothers
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used to dress children, which was the highest gap, at around 75% compared to almost 1% for
fathers
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alone, up 20% together.
Furthermore
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, for homework,
mothers
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allocated 50% of their
time
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to help minors,
while
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both
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parents
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helped at under 40, 10% for
fathers
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.
In contrast
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, the highest rate for
both
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parents
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doing things together was playing games with their children at 70%.
However
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, the
close
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closest
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percentage between
three
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the three
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categories was in preparing for bed by nearly 8%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words fathers, mothers, both, parents, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • Percentage
  • Parents
  • Spent time
  • Taking care
  • Children
  • Evening
  • 2022
  • Summarise
  • Information
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Relevant
  • Patterns
  • Trends
  • Highest
  • Lowest
  • Activities
  • Gender
  • Conclusion
  • Findings
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