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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
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The line graph illustrates the
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tonnes
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 of
goods
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 transported to the United Kingdom using road, rail, water, and pipeline, commencing from 1975 to 2002.
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it is clear that
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 a large proportion of products were brought through the road. Meanwhile, the transport using the rail experienced a fluctuation of
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 water and pipeline remained stable. At the start, 75
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 of
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 were transported by road;
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, it declined in 1982 and started to increase until it surged to 90
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 in 2002.
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,
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 transferred by rail exhibited a fluctuation, from 40
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 in 1975; dropped to 30
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 in 1986 and 1994 before going back to the same amount as it started
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, the amount of products distributed through pipeline and water remained steady for several years. 40
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 of
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 were shipped to the UK, started to increase in 1978, and remained stable at 50
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tonnes
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 until it peaked
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 61
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
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, 5
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 of commodities were moved by pipelines in 1975; and remained unchanged from 1995 to 2002 at 20
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tonnes
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tonnes, goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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