The chart below shows the percentage of people of different age groups who went to cinema once a month or more in one European country from 2000 to 2011

The chart below shows the percentage of people of different age groups who went to cinema once a month or more in one European country from 2000 to 2011
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The line chart displays
the
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information about the individuals based on their
age
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who went to a movie theatre monthly or more in a European country over
a
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11 year
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period
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between 2000 and 2011. From an
overall
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perspective, all the
age
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groups saw an upward trend. People aged between 15-24 years had major fluctuations at some points
while
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7
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-14 and 25-35 categories illustrated a similar pattern from 200 to 2011.
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Age
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group 35 and over remained steady and increased gradually
at the end
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of the
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. Looking at the details, young people aged between 15-24 stood at around 15% in 2000, and
then
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rose significantly to reach the highest point
aroound
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around
50% in 2011. In 2007, the figure jumped to a little below 50% from around 30% in 2006, and
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fell back to the same in 2008, later
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to the same. A contrastive trend was recorded in the people from 35 and above during the
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, which
incresed
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increased
gradually from around 1% in 2000 to approximately 10% in 2011. The
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period
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witnessed about 15% climb in the 7-14
age
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group, which was around 10% in 2000 and about 25% in 2011. A
simila
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similar
pattern could be seen in the young adult group between 25-35 years with wild fluctuations from 2008 to 2010 with the highest and lowest
percentage
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shown in 2009 closer to 30% and 2008 at around 10%, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cinema-going
  • Attendance
  • Frequency
  • Demographics
  • Trends
  • Percentage
  • Fluctuations
  • Technological advancements
  • Streaming services
  • Leisure activity
  • Data analysis
  • Decrease/increase
  • Age groups: Teenagers, Young adults, Middle-aged, Seniors
  • Periodic comparison
  • Socioeconomic factors
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