The line chart shows the numbers of members for five different activities which is film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances in Melbourne, Australia during 2000 to 2020, looking from an overall perspective, the film club make up the largest participants during these 20 years.

The line chart shows the numbers of members for five different activities which is film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances in Melbourne, Australia during 2000 to 2020, looking from an overall perspective, the film club make up the largest participants during these 20 years.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line chart shows the numbers of members for five different activities which is film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances in Melbourne, Australia during 2000 to 2020, looking from an overall perspective, the film club make up the largest participants during these 20 years.
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it
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can be seen,
the
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table tennis had a soar increase which started from less than 20 to more than 50,
while
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amateur dramatics dropped slightly by almost 20 members from 2005. The musical performances
seems
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to be built in 2005 and had a stable growth in these 15 years. The martial arts and the film club remained
in
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the same, and the film club was the most popular
activities
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, which had almost 70 people during that time.

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