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The pie charts below show the percentage of goods transported by five different means within a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the percentage of goods transported by five different means within a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.
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There are
five
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 different
modes
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 of transportation, where goods are transported from eastern and western regions and the rest of the country.
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, there are two
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 that show
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which
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 of the
five
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modes
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 of transport are used more between between the eastern and western regions. These
five
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modes
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 are by
road
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, rail, river, pipeline or air. Evidently, in these two
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graphics
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graphics,
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 we can see many differences
on
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 the percentages, of how much these
five
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 means are used,
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however
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 one big similarity is that in both
graphics
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 the most used mode is by
road
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, even though the western
region
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 graphic is more divided between the
five
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modes
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, the biggest percentage is by
road
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 with 35%, in the eastern
road
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 is used at 60%.
On the other hand
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, the pipeline is much less used in the eastern
region
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 than in the western
region
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, in the east is used
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apply
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5% and in the west 20%. Talking about the
five
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modes
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, both have the same 10%, being the western
region
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 the one with
those extra 5%
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.
To conclude
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, we can agree that these
graphics
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 have many similarities, but on some
modes
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 of transport, there are many differences.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words five, modes, graphics, road, region with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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