The pie charts below show the average household expenditure in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditure in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts below show the average household expenditure in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the average household
expenses
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in
Japan
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and
Malaysia
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in
the
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2010.
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,
People
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is
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in
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Malaysia
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were seen spending much of their income on housing
expenses
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,
while
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people
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from
Japan
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spent most of their money on miscellaneous
expenses
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. On one hand, In
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Malaysia
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the 3 biggest expenditures were housing,
trasnport
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transport
and food with 35.0%, 15.0%, and 27.0% respectively. Health care and other services were given the
least
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lowest
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percentage of
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expenditure in
Malaysia
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with just 3.0% and 20.0% respectively.
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Japan
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Japan,
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the 3 major
expenses
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which
was
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important to
people
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were
,
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other
expenses
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, housing, and food with 29.0%, 21.0%, and 24.0% respectively. Health care was taken more seriously by
people
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in
Japan
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as compared to
Malaysia
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with 6.0% of their expenditure spent as compared to
Malaysia
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with just 3%. Transport was
also
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more important to the
poeple
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people
of
Japan
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as they spent 20% of their income as compared to
Malaysia
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with just 15%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenses, japan, malaysia, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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