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The chart below shows the number of participants in different activities in Newport city from 2000-2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of participants in different activities in Newport city from 2000-2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph demonstrates the
number
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 of
participants
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 in different activities in Newport City from the
year
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 2000 to 2020.
Overall
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, dramatics had the maximum participation throughout the years,
while
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 poetry had the lowest. More than 60
participants
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 enrolled in dramatics in 2000.
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number
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 remained steady until the
year
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 2020. Another
activity
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 that remained steady was music, which saw participation between 30 and 40 people. Around 15 people participated in tennis in 2000.
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number
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 grew to more than 50
participants
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 by 2020 making it the 2nd most participated
activity
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. Swimming
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 experienced some growth. Even though
this
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activity
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 received participation only after 2010, it grew to almost 20
participants
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 by 2020.
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 the
number
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 of
participants
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 in different activities either remained steady or grew, poetry saw a major decline by the
year
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 2020. Almost 25 people participated in poetry in 2000, but
this
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number
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 steeply declined to only around 5 enrolments by the
year
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 2020 making it the least participated
activity
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, participants, year, activity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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