The table below shows the proportion of women in the labor force and women in management in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. (Thảo)

The table below shows the proportion of women in the labor force and women in management in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. (Thảo)
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table below shows the proportion of women in the labor force and women in management in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. (Thảo)
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The table shows data
of
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on
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female workers working as employees and
managers
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in five countries(
Australia
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,
Egypt
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,
Sri
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Lanka
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,
Japan
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, and
United
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the United
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States). The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, the highest percentage of female workers is in
Japan
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followed by the USA
while
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the lowest is in
Egypt
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.
Moreover
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, the
least
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lowest
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percentile of
women
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as
managers
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is
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are
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in
Sri
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lanka
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Lanka
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and the maximum is in
Australia
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and
United
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the United
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states
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States
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.
This
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tabular chart shows that 48 per cent of
women
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are working in
Japan
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followed by 46% and 42% in
United
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the United
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States and
Australia
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respectively.
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41 per cent of female employees are present in
Sri
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Lanka
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.
Moreover
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, the
least
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lowest
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percentage (20%) of working females is recorded in
Egypt
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.
Furthermore
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, there is
equal
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the equal
an equal
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percentile of female
managers
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in
Australia
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and America.
While
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17% and 12% of
women
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are working as
managers
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in countries
Japan
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and
Egypt
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subsequently
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.
However
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, the lowest percentage of
women
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managers
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being
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apply
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9 per cent is shown in
Sri
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Lanka
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words managers, australia, egypt, sri, lanka, japan, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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