The chart below contains information provided by Australia's tertiary institutions about the percentage of male and female students who enrolled in different subjects in 1995.

The chart below contains information provided by Australia's tertiary institutions about the percentage of male and female students who enrolled in different subjects in 1995.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below contains information provided by Australia's tertiary institutions about the percentage of male and female students who enrolled in different subjects in 1995.
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The bar chart above
defins
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defines
information about the
males
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male's
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and
females
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females'
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percentage
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percentages
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on
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for
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differente
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different
majors, back in 1995. Starting with
Art
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the Art
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& Humanities field, most females take
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major, with more than 17% of them,
also
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male
seems
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seem
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to like it to more than 12% of them
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choice
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it.
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, Health is the second
choice
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frmales
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females
as it
apper
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appears
appear
in the bar chart with 15%,
in
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on
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the other hand
male
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males
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have the lowest percentage in the field, less than 5%
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choice
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it.
Moreover
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, Engineering
apper
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appears
to be more popular with
male
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the male
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group, most of them
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choice
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choose
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it
with
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apply
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more than 17%, but in
female
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the female
a female
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group the seems that they don't
favorite
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like it
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the
have
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has
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the lowest percentage in
this
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major less than 3%.
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,
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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share
there
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their
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interest
intreast
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interest
in one field which it was Art & Humanities with more than 12% in males and above than 17% for females group, but in Health and Engineering they have
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different
differente
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different
views

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words choice with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • tertiary institutions
  • enrolment
  • engineering
  • information technology
  • nursing
  • gender roles
  • societal expectations
  • suitability
  • caregiving roles
  • job market
  • business studies
  • gender distribution
  • gender inclusion policies
  • workplace diversity
  • gender stereotypes
  • historical trends
  • percentages
  • subjects
  • gender imbalance
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