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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.Write a report for a university lecturer reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.dung

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.Write a report for a university lecturer reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.dung
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The pie charts illustrate the difference
of
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in
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 various sources of
energy
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 production namely coal, other, nuclear, natural gas and
petro
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petrol
 in France in 1995 and 2005. The data is measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is evident that the production from all types of sources increased over time except petro which decreased in the later year. By observing the graphs, it can be seen that a minor difference of almost 1% was noticed between the contribution of coal to
energy
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 in 1995 and 2005 accounted 29.80% and 30.93% respectively. The involvement of others and nuclear
in
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energy
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 production increased from 4.90% and 6.40% in 1995 to 9.10% and 10.10% in 2005.
Furthermore
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, natural gas was making
contribution
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 of 29.63% in
energy
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 manufacturing in the initial year, which rose to 30.31% in 2005.
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, the proportion of petro
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was 29.27% in 1995, which declined by approximately 10% in the next year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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