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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000
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The line graph gives detailed information about the amount of
fuel
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 produced in
UK
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the UK
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 using three different sources of
fuel
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: petroleum,coal,and
naturalgas
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natural gas
 over a period of 19 years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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petroluem
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petroleum
 was by far the most important means of
fuel
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 over
a
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the
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 period shown. Coal provided the lowest amount of
fuel
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 production in each year. Looking at details, petroleum production was about 100 energy
units
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,
rised
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rising
 sharply to nearly 140
units
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 by 1986. After fluctuating around
this
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 level, it dropped to 100
units
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 in 1991 before increasing again to
raughly
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roughly
 140 by 2000.
Whereas
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,coal production
begam
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began
 at nearly 80
units
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1981
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in 1981
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 but declined significantly after 1984, it remained to stay 60
units
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 from 1990. By 2000, it had dropped to roughly 40
units
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.
On the other hand
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, natural gas depicted
steady
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a steady
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 increase from about 40
units
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 in 1981 to nearly 100
units
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i
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in
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 2000. It
leave
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left
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 behind coal around 1995 and continued rising.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • overall decline
  • depletion
  • shift in energy policies
  • global oil prices
  • extraction technology
  • cleaner energy sources
  • technological advancements
  • investment in nuclear energy
  • diversification
  • traditional fossil fuels
  • sustainable options
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