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The graph below shows China's population by age group starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2050 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The graph below shows China's population by age group starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2050 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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The graph illustrates the
percentege
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percentage
 of China's population across three age groups from the year 1960
forcasted
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forecasted
 until the year 2050.
Overall
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, the 0-14 age group have been seeing a significant
decrese
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decrease
 over the years;
However
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, The 15-64 group was stable until 2010 where it is evident there is a moderate increase predicted in the coming years,
whereas
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 the 65+ group was seeing an
overall
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 increase from the start until there was a peak in population in 2020, and
then
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 it is predicted to see a minor decline afterwards. The population
percentege
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percentage
 across the groups are seeing a major fluctuation over the years, where is the 0-14
groups
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was
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dominante
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dominant
 at the
begining
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beginning
 with a
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percentage
 slightly
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below
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 the 52.5% mark,
whereas
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 the 15-64
goup
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group
 just above
the
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35% and the 65+
was
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marginly
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marginally
mainly
 lowers at around the 5% mark.
However
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, the predictions are seeing a significant change, where it is going to be the other way around by the time we reach 2050.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, overall, whereas".
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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