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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.Write a report for a university lecturer reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.dung

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.Write a report for a university lecturer reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.dung
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage share of electricity
production
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sources
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 in France in the years 1995 and 2005. These
sources
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 include
gas
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, coal,
pertro
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petrol
Petro
, nuclear, and other resources.
Overall
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, it is clear from both graphs that
gas
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 and coal remained the dominant
sources
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 throughout the period,
while
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petro
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production
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 share declined. Meanwhile, by 2005 the increased share for nuclear and others indicates that France started to rely more on other resources than
gas
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 and coal.
To begin
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 with, in 1995,
gas
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, coal, and
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petro
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petrol
 each accounted for approximately one-third of the total
production
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, making them the primary energy resources.
Additionally
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, by 2005,
gas
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 and coal slightly increased to 30.31% and 30.93%, respectively, compared to
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petro
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Petro
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 which experienced a significant fall to 19.55%.
On the other hand
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, nuclear and other
sources
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 contributed relatively little to electricity
production
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 in 1995,
whereas
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 in 2005 their
production
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 had surged from 6.45% and 4.9% to 16.10% and 9.10%, respectively. These figures indicated that
while
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 France continued to depend mainly on
gas
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, coal, and
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petro
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petrol
 for electricity generation, it
also
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 expanded its energy vectors to nuclear and other
sources
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, sources, gas, petro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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