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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide(CO2) emission per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden , Italy and portugal between 1967 and 2007 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main featire and make comparisions where relevant

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide(CO2) emission per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden , Italy and portugal between 1967 and 2007 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main featire and make comparisions where relevant
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The line graph illustrates the average carbon dioxide (CO₂)
emissions
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 per
person
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, measured in metric
tonnes
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, in four European countries—namely the United Kingdom,
Sweden
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, Italy, and Portugal—between 1967 and 2007.
Overall
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,
while
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 CO₂
emissions
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 in the UK and
Sweden
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 showed a declining trend, Italy and Portugal experienced a steady increase over the
period
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. At the beginning of the
period
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, the UK had the highest
emissions
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, with each
person
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 producing around 11 metric
tonnes
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 of CO₂ in 1967.
This
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 figure gradually declined over time, reaching approximately 9 metric
tonnes
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 in 2007.
Similarly
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,
Sweden
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 recorded around 8.5 metric
tonnes
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 per
person
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 in 1967.
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,
emissions
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 in
Sweden
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 dropped significantly to about 6 metric
tonnes
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 by 1987 and continued to decline steadily, reaching just below 6 metric
tonnes
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 in 2007.
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, both Italy and Portugal followed an upward trend. In 1967, Italy’s per capita
emissions
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 stood at around 4 metric
tonnes
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, and
this
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 number rose consistently, peaking at about 7.5 metric
tonnes
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 in 1997 before stabilizing. Meanwhile, Portugal had the lowest
emissions
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 at the start of the
period
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, with only 1 metric tonne per
person
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.
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, its
emissions
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 rose sharply, reaching approximately 5.7 metric
tonnes
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 in 1997, where it remained relatively stable until 2007. By the end of the
period
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,
emissions
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 in Portugal and
Sweden
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 converged at just below 6 metric
tonnes
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,
while
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 the UK still had the highest
emissions
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, despite its significant decline. Italy,
on the other hand
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, had surpassed
Sweden
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, maintaining the second-highest level of CO₂
emissions
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words co₂, emissions, person, tonnes, sweden, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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