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The chart above shows details about the percentage of the human population in four Asian Countries. Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia, that are living in main cities from 1970 to 2020. with a guess for 2030 and 2040.

The chart above shows details about the percentage of the human population in four Asian Countries. Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia, that are living in main cities from 1970 to 2020. with a guess for 2030 and 2040.
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The line chart above
illustrate
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the
population
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percentage
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 in four Asian
Countries
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.
Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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 and Indonesia,
that are
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have
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 already living in major
cities
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 from 1970 to 2020, and
forcasting
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forecasting
 2030 and 2040. Starting with past information, in 1970
Philippines
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 had more than 30% of their
population
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livied
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lived
living
 in main
cities
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, and with nearly the same
percentage
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Malaysia
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have
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had
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 exactly 30%
people
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of people
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.
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,
Thailand
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 and Indonesia had less than 20%
from
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of
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 their
population
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 in major
cities
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.
Moreover
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, in 1980
Thailand
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increases
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increased
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 their citizens to more than 20%, and
other
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the other
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 three
countries
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stay
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stayed
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 at their
percentage
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.
However
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, in 1990
Philippines
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 and
Malaysia
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improve
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improved
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 their
percentage
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 to
be
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more than 40%.
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, from 2000 to 2020
Philippines
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decline
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declined
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 their
population
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 to reach nearly 40%, and
Malaysia
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increses
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increased
 rapidly
with
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in
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their
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apply
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percentage
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 until
they
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it
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rech
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reached
 above 70% of their
population
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 in
main
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the main
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cities
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.
Moreover
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, let go
to
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of
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 the
forcasting
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forecasting
know
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apply
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,
from
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that from
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 2020 to 2040
it
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apply
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forcasting
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forecasting
 the four
countries
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 will
contenu
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continue
 to increase their
percentage
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.
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Also
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Also,
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 the highest
countre
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country
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with
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apply
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population
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percentage
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 will living in 2024 will be
Malaysia
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 with more than 80%, and the lowest is
Thailand
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 with
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around
arownd
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around
 45%,
To sum up
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, people in past was not lived in
main
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the main
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cities
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 but
know
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now
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 they
showes
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show
 high increases in the main
cities
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 for the four
asin
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Asian
countries
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an
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and
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wspecially
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especially
Malaysia
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, percentage, countries, philippines, malaysia, thailand, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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