Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The environmental
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of excessive packaging of goods
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the
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manufacturers and shopping stores
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been
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for a decade.
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I acknowledge that
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issue
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should be
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the
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responsibility of
entreprenuers
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entrepreneurs
, I believe that individuals should
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play a pivotal role in addressing the
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too
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.
On the other hand
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, manufacturers and supermarkets should focus on the
decresing
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decreasing
of packaging.
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, they should consider
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use
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environmental
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friendly materials
instead
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of
plastic
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.
This
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will help reduce the
plastic
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waste in packaging production and it will result in decreasing the level of green carbon in the world.
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, the businessman should create
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re-
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reuse
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use
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bags campaign by giving
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rebate if the buyers bring their own
reusuable
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reusable
bags.
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campaign will
defnitely
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definitely
the excessive of packaging goods in the industry.
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,
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individuals should
also
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contribute
in
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reducing the
use
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of
plastic
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packaging in
a
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several ways. The easiest way for the buyers to start off is
that
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they
should
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support the business which is harmful
for
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the environment.
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, they should not purchase products that
using
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a
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plastic
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for packaging.
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, the business will not be able to produce more as
lacking
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there is a lack
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of demand.
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,
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consumers should play a crucial role
to support
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in supporting
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the
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businesses that
use
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eco-friendly materials to wrap the
product
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products
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or as
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packaging
such
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as bamboo or recycled materials. In conclusion, not only the businessman should be responsible for the environmental
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of
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packaging consumption, but the customers should
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be a part of the community to reduce the
use
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of excessive packaging.

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task achievement
Clarify your main points in both views for better understanding.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your paragraphs flow smoothly and ideas connect well.
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Use more varied vocabulary and correct spelling for clearer communication.
task achievement
You present a balanced view of both sides of the argument.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay structure is clear, with an introduction, body, and conclusion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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