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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps illustrate the layout of a
harbour
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 named Porth
Harbour
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 between 2000 and today.
Overall
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, the
harbour
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 underwent a significant change in the course of recent years, ensuring that it can serve
much
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many
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 more visitors by building more tourism-related facilities. Currently, there are two docks in the
harbour
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, making twice
number
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the number
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 of passenger ferries stopping there. On the west of the
harbour
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, a new shower & toilets building has
constracted
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constructed
contracted
 between the two car parks on the east of the main
road
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.
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, the positions of
marina
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the marina
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 and fishing boats have been switched, both of them on the east of the
showers
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shower
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 facilities. Entering the side
road
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 from
main
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the main
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road
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, the old
road
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 toward a car park in 2000 disappeared,
by contrast
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, a new cafe has been added next to the lifeboat spot.
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, a new hotel has been replaced
a
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with a
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disused castle in 2000, and the former public beach has
also
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 been changed to private, only for the new hotel. In these years, the public beach remained the position,
locating
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located
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the
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apply
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north of the docks.

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task achievement
Your introduction clearly states what the maps depict, which is good. However, consider summarizing the main changes in one or two sentences in the introduction for a more cohesive overview.
coherence and cohesion
While you have detailed various changes, organizing your points in a more logical manner would improve coherence. For example, discussing the changes in tourism facilities separately from transportation changes could enhance clarity.
grammar and accuracy
Proofread your essay for small errors, such as spelling and grammar (e.g., 'constracted' should be 'constructed'). Such errors can affect your overall impression, even if they are minor.
content
You've effectively highlighted a range of changes in the harbour, which shows your understanding of the maps.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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