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The line graph below shows the average daily maximum temperatures for Auckland and Christchurch, two cities in New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, two cities in the United Kingdom.

The line graph below shows the average daily maximum temperatures for Auckland and Christchurch, two cities in New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, two cities in the United Kingdom.
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The graph illustrates the average measurements of daily maximum
temperatures
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 in two
cpecific
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specific
 cities in New Zealand,
as well as
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 in two regions in the UK.
It is clear that
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 a warm season in New Zealand lasts in winter and autumn,
whereas
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 summer and spring are considered there as a cold period of the year.
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, the situation in the United Kingdom is absolutely opposite as we can see the highest levels of
temperatures
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 between May and September. Focusing first on
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New Zealand's areas, from January until May,
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 from October until January, the average daily
temperatures
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 there are approximately 15 to 25
Celsius
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degrees
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. The
weathers
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 differs during the other months
,
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 when we can see the measurements between 10 and 17
Celsius
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degrees
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. Notably, the
temperatures
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 in Auckland are roughly 2 to 5
degrees
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 higher throughout the period. As for the weather in the UK, London is a warmer place compared to Edinburg. From January to May, the maximum average
temperatures
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 taken in these cities every day, are fixed at the levels of 5 to 15
Celsius
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degrees
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, as opposed to the figures taken between May and September, with nearly 15 to 22
Celsius
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degrees
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. After that, the
temperatures
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 drop to their initial levels.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, celsius, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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