In many countries people have to pay for medical care, but some think that it should be a free service provided by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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that
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medical
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must be free for
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from the doctor and all
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they believe they must get it for free.
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others are opposed to
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issue. On the one hand, a category of
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believe that
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must pay for everything. Because the government must take the taxes
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the
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poor.
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, a category of
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think that it must be affordable for
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to get some medical
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doctor
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or other staff,
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some
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. Because those
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are not able to pay.
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old person who does not have family or
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who will look after
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her/him, some kind of
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must be free. In conclusion, I believe particularly
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who are not able to pay or do not have
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who can look after,
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must
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by the authorities. Because all these
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are getting older day after day
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their
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become more
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, I believe those
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really need funding or other staff.
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people
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who do not need any kind of help
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or other they must not be helped.

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Make sure to clearly express your opinion in the introduction. It helps to have a clear thesis statement that reflects your stance on the topic.
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Support your points with relevant examples or evidence. This will strengthen your arguments and make your essay more persuasive.
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Work on grammar and vocabulary to avoid small inaccuracies that can affect clarity. For instance, use 'agree' instead of 'are agree' and 'medicines' instead of 'medicins.'
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Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and figures to logically connect ideas. This will enhance the overall flow of your essay.
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You presented a balanced perspective by discussing both sides of the argument, which is great for task achievement.
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Your intention to discuss multiple views is commendable and essential for a comprehensive analysis of the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal coverage
  • equity
  • fundamental human right
  • out-of-pocket expenses
  • financial hardship
  • preventative measures
  • social contract
  • quality of care
  • high demand
  • limited resources
  • tax implications
  • budget priorities
  • universal healthcare systems
  • public health
  • disease burden
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