The bar chart provides information about the level of female unemployment in four parts of the United Kingdom between the years of 2013 to 2014

The bar chart provides information about the level of female unemployment in four parts of the United Kingdom between the years of 2013 to 2014
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The data provides key information about the level of unemployment
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among female
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female
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females
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acrross
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across
the four
part
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parts
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of the
UK
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from 2013 to 2014 .
overall
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, it's clear from the graph that there is a
diffrent
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difference
different
between the amount of
female's
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females
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being
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apply
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unemployment in the
UK
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between 2013 and 2014 . In
addtion
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addition
,
Woman's
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Women
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in 2014 had a
biger
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number of
worker's
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workers
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in the
UK
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.
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, Woman's in 2013 had the lowest number .
According to
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what is shown , In 2013 England
is
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at the top of the list with the highest amount of
unempolyment
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unemployment
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for female's
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female's
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females
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with 6.8 per cent . Followed by Northern Ireland with 5.6
percentage
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. Wales is placed at the third place
at
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on
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the list with 5.4 per cent of unemployment female in 2013 in the
UK
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. in terms of , In 2014 we can see a drop in England Northern Ireland and
wales
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Wales
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percentage
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percentages
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.
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, Scotland had an increase
of
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in
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the level of female
unemploymen
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unemployment
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rate
  • temporal trends
  • regional variations
  • economic policies
  • industry growth/decline
  • educational opportunities
  • social implications
  • gender equality
  • workforce participation
  • family income
  • employment opportunities
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