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The chart below shows information about fuel used in the transport sector in different countries in Europe, compared to the EU average, in 2009 and 2010.

The chart below shows information about fuel used in the transport sector in different countries in Europe, compared to the EU average, in 2009 and 2010.
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The graph shown points out the
percentage
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 of
fuel
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 used in
transport
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the transport
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 sector of six
european
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European
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 countries,
such
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 as
Slowakia
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Slovakia
, Italy, France, Austria, Spain and Greece, with an additional trend giving information
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 the EU Average
percentage
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 in 2009 and 2010.
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, the highest ratio of
fuel
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the
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Slowakia in 2009, which represents an overwhelming majority compared to the same country's fraction in 2010.
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, in Italy, France and Greece, there is a modest upward trend
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 the
percentage
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 of
fuel
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 used in transport in 2010, compared to the one in 2009. Austria,
on the other hand
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, is the only country where the trend remains constant over the two years. In conclusion, the
european
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European
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 average
graoph
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graph
 shows a plummet
on
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in
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 the
percentage
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 of
fuel
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 used in the transport sector between the two years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, fuel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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