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The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and C) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and C) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The picture illustrates the map of
the
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Ellington
city
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City
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 and three different places for the construction of
new
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a new
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 supermarket. Most business owners try to locate their market near
the
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residential areas,
therefore
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,
option
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 C and A are much better locations.
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the
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site A, it
surrounded
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 by
the
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houses and the railway separates it from the industrial area. The park and traffic-free zone are
also
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 not very far from A. Even though there is no motorway nearby, it would
the
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 best choice to build
new
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a new
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 shopping
center
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 here. Site C is
also
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 located near the residential area, but, not as close as A. There is
also
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same
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 railway that
constructed
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was constructed
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 between the C and local industry.
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, it is on the village side and it can negatively influence
for
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the
developing
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 of the business.
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,
the
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location B is
also
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 available, even
it
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 is located far side of the countryside. It has only one advantage
that
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 motorway is not too far from
this
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 place. Notwithstanding, it is not the best location for new business, especially for
supermarket
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supermarkets
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. It is one of the most significant things that to choose the proper location for every company as it would
effect
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 the future of it.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proposed sites
  • supermarket
  • locations
  • central
  • outskirts
  • residential areas
  • transport hubs
  • proximity
  • major roads
  • landmarks
  • accessibility
  • competition
  • shopping district
  • industrial area
  • green spaces
  • logistic ease
  • isolated
  • densely populated
  • traffic
  • customer reach
  • expansion possibilities
  • accessibility
  • customer base
  • logistical convenience
  • recommend
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