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You have a full time job and are also doing a part-time evening cource.You now find that you cannot countinue the vourse.Write a letter to the cource tutor.in your letter

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Dear course tutor My name is
jackson
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. I
study
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your
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center
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 in a group.The reason why
i
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 am writing
this
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 letter to you is that
i
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I
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 want to tell
about
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you about
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 my
courc
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court
course
.Nowadays
i
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 can not attend the lesson
the
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mainly because
i
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 need
much
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a lot of
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 money. Suddenly my mum
illed
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filled
killed
 like
heart
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 attack.We have to do
big
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a big
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 operation
thats
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that
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i
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 need to collect
much
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apply
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cash and
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 do not have money for
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the cource
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cource
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course
. You know
i
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 work
day
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the day
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 shift and
i
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 need to change my shift. After
that
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i
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 will not go
cource
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course
source
. I collect enough money to have
operation
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an operation
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 after
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 restart to
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study
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.
Unfortunayelly i
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 will
spent
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 my time without studying. I try to solve my all problems. I will restart
the
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study
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studies
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 next year and
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to
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on studying
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study
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Consideration
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 my situation
i
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 hope you got me right. Yours faithfully, Nicolas Jackson.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea to improve readability.
task achievement
Ensure that your writing maintains a formal tone throughout, especially in a letter to a tutor.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling carefully, as errors can distract from your message. For example, 'course' is spelled incorrectly in several places.
task achievement
It's important to clearly state your situation, but also to explain how you plan to resume your studies. This demonstrates commitment.
task achievement
You have a clear reason for your letter, which is important in a formal communication.
task achievement
You have expressed your situation honestly and provided personal context, which is commendable.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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