In the future, more people will choose to go on holidays in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday? Do you ageree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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There is no denying the fact that in recent years, domestic tourism has gained popularity,

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belief that many individuals will choose to go on vacation in their own country, there is

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an argument that other people prefer to spend their own holidays

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travel

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abroad

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topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On the one hand, why people might prefer to

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within their own country because of low cost.

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, international

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often requires expensive flights , accommodation, and Visa applications, making it less affordable for many.

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, domestic tourism allows individuals to explore new places without the financial burden of foreign

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, in my country, many families now choose to visit scenic local destinations rather than spend money on overseas trips.

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coherence and cohesion

Make sure to consistently use proper grammar and punctuation throughout your essay. Additionally, avoid vague phrasing. For example, revise 'a commonly belief' to 'a common belief'.

task achievement

Include more specific details or examples to strengthen your arguments. For instance, you could elaborate on the types of local destinations that families might be visiting or provide statistics about domestic tourism growth.

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Your introduction effectively outlines the two sides of the argument, setting up the discussion well.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

144 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

domestic tourism
environmentally sustainable
carbon footprint
local culture
heritage
post-pandemic
economic benefits
support local businesses
create jobs
stimulate the economy
familiarity
cultural barriers
language barriers

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