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The process diagram below shows the process of how to puerh tea is made. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Umar

The process diagram below shows the process of how to puerh tea is made. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Umar
The illustration depicts the procedure of how to pu’erh and the method of making two
type
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 of
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tea’s
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tea
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 raw
tea
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 and ripe
tea
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 which involves several steps, including rolling,drying,fermentation and
aging
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ageing
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 with
a slight differences
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slight differences
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 in each kind.
Overall
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,the 7 stages linear , involved several steps of manufacturing two
type
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 of
the
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apply
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tea
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 Raw
tea
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 and Ripe
tea
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. That
starting
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starts
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 with a rolling, drying below the sun and ending with a compression. First of all,
it’s
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’s
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 inactivation of enzymes
it
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means pan frying when they
are
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change
the
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apply
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colour , that time for
rolling
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the rolling
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 procedure and drying below the sun
during
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 some time ,
moreover
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 colour
have
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 to be
brightly
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,
subsequently
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 making Loose Raw
tea
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 ,which
throw
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 the process Fermentation by Mold to create Loose Rip
tea
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, so that can be compressing and became Pu-erh Ripe
tea
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, after
the
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drying under the sun, it
have
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 another way to make
a
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apply
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tea
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,exactly going to compression , thereby creating Pu-erh Raw
tea
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 in turn which must
have
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apply
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a
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apply
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require
aging
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ageing
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,
aging
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ageing
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 by storage , eventually
form
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forming
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 vintage Pu-erh Raw
tea
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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