The bar chart provides information about the level of female unemployment in four parts of the United Kingdom between the years of 2013 to 2014

The bar chart provides information about the level of female unemployment in four parts of the United Kingdom between the years of 2013 to 2014
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This
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diagram illustrates the percentage of female unemployment in
four
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regions of the UK between 2013 and 2014. Looking from an
overall
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perspective, it is readily apparent that there
is
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no dramatic differences among
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four
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the four
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areas in both years, and Scotland's level of female unemployment became the highest point in
four
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parts of the United Kingdom in 2014. As
it
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apply
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can be seen, England had the most unemployed female in 2013, but in the next year, Scotland's rates became the highest,
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0.6
percent
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from 6.1% to 6.7%, which
also
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was the only increasing region,
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another three fields.
Northen
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Northern
Ireland had the most significant decrease,
pulmmeted
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plummeted
1% in one year and became the lowest area
had
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unemployed
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an unemployed
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female
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females
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in 2014. Wales and England
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had declined rates between the years of 2013 to 2014. Wales reduced 0.4
percent
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, maintained
it
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its
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stage of
four
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parts of the United Kingdom, and England had
minimum
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a minimum
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reduction,
dropped
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to 6.5% from the top point, 6.8%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words four with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rate
  • temporal trends
  • regional variations
  • economic policies
  • industry growth/decline
  • educational opportunities
  • social implications
  • gender equality
  • workforce participation
  • family income
  • employment opportunities
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