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The charts give information about music sales in a US music store in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give information about music sales in a US music store in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart
provises
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provides
 key information about the selling of songs in
the
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US stores in a
10-years
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10-year
 period .
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that music
have
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 a huge impact
in
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the
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US stores . In
additon
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addition
, CDs purchased are taking the lead in the year 2011 .
Whereas
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, The streams are in the
last
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 place in 2011.
According to
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 what is shown, CDs purchased faced a significant drop in the 10-year period , it was at more than 50 per
cent
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 to less than 30 . Downloads number increased in 2014 it went from less to more than 40
percentage
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 but it
also
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 decreased after 2014 to 30 per
cent
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 in the year 2017 . In
term
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of
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, Streams
was't
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wasn't
 a thing in 2011 but
it
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they
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facued
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faced
caused
 a noticeable rise in 2017 . it
rised
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rose
raised
rises
 from less than 10 per
cent
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 to 40 per
cent
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 between 2011 to 2017 . And it is clear
form
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 the chart that Streams are taking the lead in 2017 .

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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