The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.
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The chart illustrates the proportions of males and females who
succseesd
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succeeded
in their driving test in a particular Asian country from 1980 to 2010.
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, the percentage of women who got their driving licence
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was higher than of the men throughout the
period
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.
Intersetingly
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Interestingly
, both
genders
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gender's
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rates recorded an incredible increase at the beginning of the 21st century. In the first
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period
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the women's share in passing the driving test was higher than the other gender, as the former was less than fifty
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,
while
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the latter was about 28%.As the data clearly indicates, in the following
period
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the female rate
also
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came as the highest,
moreover
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it rose slightly to above fifty%. Men
also
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expernced
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experienced
experience
a
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growth
in the same
period
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,reaching approximately 38%.
In
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the beginning of the new century, the women's bar witnessed a dramatic increase as it peaked at almost 70%. Though
,
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in the
last
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period
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it fell slightly to just over 60, it outraced the other gender share.One notable aspect
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is the percentage of men who got their licence rose to 49,and it reported the same proportions in the
last
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given
period
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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