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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of population aged 65 and above in three countries

The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of population aged 65 and above in three countries
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The table illustrates the proportion of people at the age of 65 in Canada,Germany, and
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UK
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the UK
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. In 1988,2000, and a
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forecast
 of the numbers in 2030.
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, the
percentage
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 of people
who
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aged
to
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65 and over, increased almost in all the countries throughout the
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 period, notably, Germany ranked the highest. Despite reporting the same
percentage
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 in
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UK
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the UK
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 in
first
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the first
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 two years,
this
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 category is expected to increase in 2030. As the data indicates, the Germans who aged
to
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65 recorded the highest proportions in 1988 and 2000 at 20.45 %,
25.32
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and 25.32
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 %,respectively.
Furthermore
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, the category rose approximately by five
percent
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;
similarly
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, Canada reported a similar growth as the
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 of people who reached 65 age went from 16,32 to 20.67 % .
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, the
percentage
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 of elderly in the
UK
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 witnessed a minor
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 from 14.23 to 14.89 %,
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, it held its rank as the lowest
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. The forecast for all
the
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three countries doubled from the previous period,
Germany
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with Germany
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30.42
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at 30.42
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 %,Canada
26.35
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at 26.35
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%,
UK
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20.35
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at 20.35
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 %. Interestingly, the
UK
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, which showed
a
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little growth in the previous two periods, is expected to exceed 20
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percentage
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per cent
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage change
  • population
  • aged 65 and above
  • information
  • table
  • data
  • trends
  • patterns
  • comparison
  • predicted
  • future
  • findings
  • comment
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