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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plan illustrated
about
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the construction of the
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porth
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harbour
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 between
in
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2000 and in present. After
in
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2000, how the
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porth
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port
harbour
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 looks today and how many
structure
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 are changing.
Overall
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, the
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porth
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port
harbour
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are
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 built by
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 from
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the economy
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economy
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 system. In 2000,
this
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harbour
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 was not interested
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investor
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. It had a little store or travel place. After
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2000, the
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porth
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port
harbour
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are
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 developed by people who
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were interesting
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interesting
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to invest
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. It has many complex entertainments. A
harbour
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 in 2000, it had only one dock in the north before it was increased dock from only one to a two dock.
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, the marina (private yachts) and the fish boast
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 swapped
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. In the west of
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, showers and toilets
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 constructed
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in 2000. In
south
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 plans, in 2000, it did not build café and shops, after the development,
this
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harbour
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has
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 café and shops
that
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near
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the lifeboat
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lifeboat
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lifeboats
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.
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, the hotel instant of the castle that was disused, and the public beach
is
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became to private beach for the hotel.

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task achievement
Your introduction could provide a clearer overview of the changes. Consider rephrasing it to mention the main features that will be discussed in the essay more explicitly.
coherence cohesion
While you have attempted to summarize the changes, some sentences lack clarity. Try to form longer, more complex sentences to enhance the grammatical range and fluency.
task achievement
Some details about the developments in the harbour are unclear. For instance, you mention 'fish boast', which may be a typo. Ensure you proofread to catch these minor errors.
coherence cohesion
The organization of the essay could be improved. For example, topics could be grouped logically, such as discussing all changes in the north first, then moving to the west and south.
task achievement
You provided a good effort in identifying some specific changes that occurred in the harbour, such as the increase in docks and the construction of new facilities.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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