You have recently bought some camping equipment but it was faulty. You phoned the shop but no action has been taken. Write a letter to the shop maneger. In your letter, -Describe the problem with the equipment -Explain what happened when you phoned the shop -Say what you would like the maneger to do

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Dear Mr. Singh, I am writing to you

for expressing

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my disappointment about some equipment that

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brought

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bought

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last

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month from your shop for my camping. I called many times

since

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over

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last

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the last

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3 weeks to solve my issues but any

kinds

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of action has not

taken

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. I brought some

nessecity

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necessary

things for my camping,

such

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as a tent, a sleeping bag, a pillow, and a mat. After opening the products,

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came to know that the zip of the sleeping bag

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broken and leakage in the tent. I phoned several times to your repair service

since

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last

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three weeks, but they did nothing to solve my problems. They directly stated that we

cannot

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solve your issue till

december

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December

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because of their

work load

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workload

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. But my friends decided to go

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apply

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camping next month in

july

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July

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. So

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can not wait for

long

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time. I have

frustrated

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from

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with

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your service and

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want my refund so that

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can purchase it again. I am willing to return your items either by Canada Post or by Purolator. I am hoping for your positive consideration.

Your

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sincerely, Rupinder Kaur.

rupindersamrow222Wed Mar 26 2025

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suitable writing tone

Consider using a more formal tone and correcting the informal language.

logical structure

Make sure to include a clearer structure, such as clear paragraphs for each point you are making.

complete response

Try to avoid grammatical errors, such as 'any kinds of action has not taken'.

complete response

You effectively described the problem with the equipment.

complete response

Your request for a refund and willingness to return the items were clearly stated.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

187 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

faulty
equipment
camping
manager
describe
problem
malfunctioning
response
replacement
refund
repair service
contact
action
complaint
tent
sleeping bag
issue
resolution

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