You have recently bought some camping equipment but it was faulty. You phoned the shop but no action has been taken. Write a letter to the shop maneger. In your letter, -Describe the problem with the equipment -Explain what happened when you phoned the shop -Say what you would like the maneger to do

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Dear Mr. Singh, I am writing to you
for expressing
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my disappointment about some equipment that
i
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brought
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bought
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last
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month from your shop for my camping. I called many times
since
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last
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3 weeks to solve my issues but any
kinds
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of action has not
taken
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. I brought some
nessecity
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necessary
things for my camping,
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as a tent, a sleeping bag, a pillow, and a mat. After opening the products,
i
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came to know that the zip of the sleeping bag
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broken and leakage in the tent. I phoned several times to your repair service
since
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last
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three weeks, but they did nothing to solve my problems. They directly stated that we
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solve your issue till
december
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because of their
work load
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. But my friends decided to go
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camping next month in
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. So
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can not wait for
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time. I have
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from
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your service and
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want my refund so that
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can purchase it again. I am willing to return your items either by Canada Post or by Purolator. I am hoping for your positive consideration.
Your
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sincerely, Rupinder Kaur.

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suitable writing tone
Consider using a more formal tone and correcting the informal language.
logical structure
Make sure to include a clearer structure, such as clear paragraphs for each point you are making.
complete response
Try to avoid grammatical errors, such as 'any kinds of action has not taken'.
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You effectively described the problem with the equipment.
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Your request for a refund and willingness to return the items were clearly stated.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • faulty
  • equipment
  • camping
  • manager
  • describe
  • problem
  • malfunctioning
  • response
  • replacement
  • refund
  • repair service
  • contact
  • action
  • complaint
  • tent
  • sleeping bag
  • issue
  • resolution
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