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Band 5

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter: Suggest how you could help her in her home Say why you would like to do this work Explain when you will and will not be available

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Dear Mrs Barrett, I am writing
this
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 letter following your advertisement to search
a
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for a
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domestic helper in your home. My name is Kayla and based in the same city as yours. The intent of
this
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 letter is to convey my interest
to apply
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in applying
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to
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for
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 the position that you are looking for. I have had some useful experiences that are related to the housekeeping matter. I am
reliable
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a reliable
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 person who has myriad skills that might be worthwhile for some aspects,
such
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 as cleaning, repairing, and driving.
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, I have a legal certificate for
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a house
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house keeper
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housekeeper
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 that
issued
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was issued
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 by the official body. The reason why I am highly interested in
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 work ,
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as
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 I favor
to do
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 physical job activities rather than sitting
all-day
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all day
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 long in the office. For
you
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 additional information, I will
available
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be available
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 to work from Sunday to Friday and will be off
in
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 Saturday. For
further
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information
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 you can easily contact me on 062 771 322. I am looking forward
for
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 your response. Best regards, Kayla

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread your letter for grammar and punctuation errors, such as 'search a domestic helper' which could be rephrased as 'searching for a domestic helper'.
coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing your letter with clearer topic sentences for each paragraph and ensuring you fully express your main ideas. For example, introduce your skills in a more structured way.
task achievement
Try to use a more formal tone in your letter, especially in the opening and closing, to reflect a professional attitude towards the job application.
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Your introduction is clear and states the purpose of your letter effectively.
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You provide relevant information about your skills and availability, which is important for the recipient.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Domestic chores
  • Culinary skills
  • Horticulture
  • Cultural immersion
  • Work ethic
  • Flexible schedule
  • Time management
  • Prior commitments
  • Punctuality
  • Reliability
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