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Band 4.5

A close relative of yours is having a birthday lunch next Friday, but you know you will be working. Write a letter to your boss or supervisor to ask for some time off. In your letter, explain the situation and why you particularly want to attend the lunch specify the dates, times and amount of time off you will need offer to work late or come in early another time to make up for the time. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mr. Jones / Dear Mrs. Jones,...

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Dear Mr. Jones, I hope you are doing well! I am writing
this
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 letter in connection with that I want some
hoildays
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holidays
. It would be from April 1st,2025. Is it possible to get some
times
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 off? Actually, my aunt suffered from some severe illness and her birthday
also
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 falls on that week. I
wants
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 to give her the best surprise on her 68th birthday. Even though
,
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 she has many grandchildren
but
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she loves me more than others. When I came to know that she was in hospital and
noone
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no one
no-one
 allowed to meet her, I
feels
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 like down in the
damps
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 and I am eagerly waiting for her recovery.
So that
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 I met her
as well as
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share
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 my
all
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ups and downs with her. Apart from
it
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, if you
provides
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 me
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the
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a
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vacations
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, it would be really appreciated
along with
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 it, I will do extra work after and before my work hours. Whether I
has
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 to come early
on
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to
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 work or I will stay for late
nights
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at nights
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 to
accomplice
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accomplish
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 my projects. I am looking
foward
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forward
 to hearing from you. Best Regards, Manjinder Kaur

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task response
Make sure to clearly state the specific dates and amount of time you need for leave. This will give your request better clarity.
task response
Try to maintain a more formal tone throughout the letter. For example, using 'I would appreciate' instead of 'it would be really appreciated' can enhance the professionalism.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure there are no grammatical errors, such as 'hoildays' should be 'holidays.' Also, be careful with verb forms, such as 'I wants' instead of 'I want.'
content
The emotional connection you expressed towards your aunt adds a personal touch to your letter, which makes it more heartfelt.
content
You offered to make up for the time off, showing your commitment to your work responsibilities, which is commendable.
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