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You have recently come back from an overseas holiday. You face some problems with the hotel booked through your travel agent. Write a letter to your travel agent. In your letter • Details about hotel booking • Problems that you faced there • Gives the distance to the travel agent so that such problems are not repeated

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
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 email to inform you about my issues with the
hotel
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 which I booked via you. First of all, I have booked a
hotel
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 via you, Number the
booking
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of booking
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 is 282833 the
hotel
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called
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is called
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 Hamme Sea. I booked a room on level 12 because I wanted to see
view
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the view
a view
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 of the city.
However
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, When I arrived
the
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at the
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hotel
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, there was a man who
carry
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was carrying
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 my suitcase,
therefore
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, I thought it
will
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would
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 be a wonderful
hotel
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,
However
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, When I gave
to
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apply
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the
receptionis
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receptionist
reception
reception is
 number of the booking, They could not find it and
then
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 they decided to put me in a different room which is on 3
level
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levels
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.
Therefore
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, I have travelled via you
for
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apply
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many times,
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, I have never faced any
probelm
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problems
,
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, If you want me to travel via you again you had better cancel the
hotel
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 which you booked for me
last
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 time. Thank you, I am looking forward to hearing back from you. Dyu Sincerely

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coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow of your paragraphs by ensuring that each paragraph focuses on a single idea. Consider separating your greeting and closing from the body of the letter.
task achievement
Make sure to check your grammar and punctuation, particularly in your sentences to improve clarity.
positive
Your friendly greeting and closing show good tone, which is important for formal correspondence.
positive
You provided specific details about your hotel booking, which is essential for the letter's purpose.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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