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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.
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The line graph illustrates three different kinds of
fuel
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 Petroleum , coal and natural
gas
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 in the United Kingdom between 1981
until
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and
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 2000.
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, petroleum was the highest source of
fuel
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 in the UK in all given periods, Coal and natural
gas
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 were not stable in
production
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 over 20 years. In200o natural
gas
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 was the second most main
fuel
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 in the
Uk
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UK
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 followed by coal. Over the 20
years
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years,
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 the
production
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 of petroleum was the first main
fuel
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 in the UK,
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 with almost 98
energy
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units
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 in 1981 to reach the highest level among the 3 groups in 1984 to be 140
energy
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units
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, a gradual drop of almost 40
energy
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units
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 in
production
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 on 1991 .from 1992 until the end of the period the
production
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 rose to be again 140
energy
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units
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 in 2000. Natural
gas
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 started with almost 40
energy
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units
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 that did not change until 1990 , increased gradually to end the period with 100
energy
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units
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 .
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 coal began with 80
energy
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units
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 which is double the natural
gas
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 in 1981 , sudden drop in
production
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 in 1984 to be almost 48
energy
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units
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. 1986 coal rose to 60
units
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 with another second decline in the
production
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 1989 till the end of the period to become the lowest
production
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 between the 3 groups by almost 49
energy
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units
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, gas, production, energy, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • overall decline
  • depletion
  • shift in energy policies
  • global oil prices
  • extraction technology
  • cleaner energy sources
  • technological advancements
  • investment in nuclear energy
  • diversification
  • traditional fossil fuels
  • sustainable options
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