The chart below shows the percentage of adults who received qualifications from a range of education providers in three years. The chart below shows the percentage of adults who received qualifications from a range of education providers in three years.

The chart below shows the percentage of adults who received qualifications from a range of education providers in three years. The chart below shows the percentage of adults who received qualifications from a range of education providers in three years.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the percentage of adults who received qualifications from a range of education providers in three years. The chart below shows the percentage of adults who received qualifications from a range of education providers in three years.
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The bar above
illustates
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illustrates
the level of
the
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apply
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physical
activity
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between males and females in Australia between
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the age
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age
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ages
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24
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of 24
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to above 65 in the year
of
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apply
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2010.
Overall
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, the
informations
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information
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placed on the chart
show
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shows
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men
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men's
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activity
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over different
age
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groups
are
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is
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declining with
advnaced
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advanced
age
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.
Whereas
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, the women
activity
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is growing over
years
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untill
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until
becoming equal
as
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to
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men
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later on life.
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,
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men
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men's
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workout is significantly high
as
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52% between 15 to 24
years
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.
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, it became
flactuated
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fluctuated
fluctuate
in
age
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groups between 25 to 54
years
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.
However
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, it picked up slightly again to 45% at
age
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55 to 64.
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, the level of
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activity
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stayed almost static at 46% at
age
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65 and over.
Secondly
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, women
on the other hand
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showed
steady
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a steady
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increment in
phyisical
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physical
activity
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from 15 to 64
years
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with
percentage
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a percentage
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between 47% to 53%.
Finally
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, it
droped
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dropped
minimally to 47% at
age
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65 and over to be equal
as
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to
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men
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.

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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words activity, age, men, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • qualifications
  • education providers
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • analyze
  • comparing
  • examine
  • impact
  • external factors
  • employment rates
  • educational policies
  • implications
  • skill development
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