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7-5, The charts below show the frequency of being happy in the last four weeks by labour status and by age group. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

7-5, The charts below show the frequency of being happy in the last four weeks by labour status and by age group. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate how
indivisuals
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individuals
individual
experiences
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experience
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happiness
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 over the past month,
according to
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 their employment status and age. In general, It can be seen that married men
feels
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feel
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 almost the same with
different
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a different
the different
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 number of
childrens
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children
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.
On the other hand
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, married women
has
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have
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 experienced more
happiness
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 with more than three
chlidrens
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children
children's
. In detail, married men
experinced
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experienced
experience
 nearly the same
happiness
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 with no
children
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 or with one to two
children
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 by 20%.
While
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 there is
slight
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a slight
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 decline
of
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in
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happiness
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 to 17% when having more than three
children
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.
However
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, married women are far different from men. With a sharp incline in
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happiness
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happiness,
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 when have more
children
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.
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?
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 In detail, only 30 have
experinced
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experienced
happiness
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 when having no
children
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. And just above 50 have felt happy with one to two
children
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. With more than three
children
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, it surged up to 60 who have experienced
happiness
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words happiness, children with synonyms.
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