You have a spare room in your apartment that you would like to rent out to a student. Write a letter to the Student Accommodation Officer of local college. In your letter, you should tell: - where your apartment is located - when the room will be available - what your requirements for a student to stay there are Begin your letter as follow: Dear…,

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Dear Sir, My name is Shivam. I am writing
this
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letter to inform you that I have a room available, which I want to rent out to a student. I am a resident of "Silver Society" which is near to the "GK college".
Moreover
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, there are good transport
facility
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facilities
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. Even a supermarket is
also
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nearby
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near
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the accommodation. The location of
apartment
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the apartment
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is on
highway25
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Highway 25
, Karnal
city
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City
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. There are some renovation work is continued for the room. From
April1
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April 1
, 2025 room is available.
Besides
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this
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, I will provide all the furniture
such
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as
bed
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, closet and study table. Not only
this
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, Wifi is
also
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included in the rent. Would be kind enough to look
in to
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this
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matter? My requirements are just basic
student
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Students
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should not consume any alcohol.
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, no
pet
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pets
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allowed
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are allowed
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in the house. The
pupil
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age should be over 18. Hoping to hear something positive from your side. Your's Faithfully, Shivam

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coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking up longer sentences for clarity and improving readability.
task response
Make sure to clearly outline your requirements in a structured format, perhaps using bullet points for better visibility.
task response
The letter effectively communicates the availability of the room and includes essential details such as furniture and location which is commendable.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately polite, contributing to a positive tone in the letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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