Some businesses now say that no-one can smoke cigarettes in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree with this?

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It is considered by some entrepreneurs that smoking is prohibited in all their offices
as well as
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government officials have agreed to follow
no
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smoke policy in public
areas
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. I completely agree with the
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, no smoking in common
areas
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of
work
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or public, which is not only injuries to our
health
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but
also
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to the
people
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around us.
Work
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space
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can be prone to
fire
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due to
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docuements
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documents
and other
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fire hazardous
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things,
while
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most public
areas
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are used by elderly
people
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and young children
such
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as parks and gardens. No smoking is commonly practiced in offices, schools and other works places to protect the infrastructure, important
docuements
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documents
, and
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health
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the health
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of employees.
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, smoking
cigrarettes
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cigarettes
can release smoke in the
work
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atmosphere and cause breathing issues to some or if the live cigarette bud is mistaken
throw
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through
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then
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it can create
fire
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. It is vital to eliminate any problems that can be caused by careless smoking. I think a better option is to dedicate a smoking area outside the
work
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environment.
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The government
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has taken initiatives to the protect
health
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of
public
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the public
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by prohibiting smoking in common
areas
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. Parks, gardens,
recreational
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and recreational
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activity
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are all examples of public spaces. Smoking is believed to be harmful to the active smoker
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for
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a
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passive smoker.
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,
people
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with asthma
needs
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to be in
smoke free
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smoke-free
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areas
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, so that they can be comfortable and enjoy
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time with their family and
friend
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friends
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especially if they are in
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common spaces. Infants, children and elderly
people
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, all have
right
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the right
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to
breath
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in fresh air which is not
contamined
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contaminated
contained
by smokers. I believe considering
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health
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the health
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of our community is as important as keeping our environment
pollution free
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pollution-free
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by not producing more carbon and releasing
in
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it in
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nature through cigarettes or any other smoking products. In conclusion, to prevent many from smoking,
government
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the government
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and some
people
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in business have supported the opinion that it should be discouraged, to promote good
health
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and safety of all. I agree with
this
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, as we must consider the
health
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of
common
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the common
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public which involves
elderly
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the elderly
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and young
people
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in our community. It is essential that we
must
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avoid smoking in works
place
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workplace
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to avoid any
fire
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hazards and keep our public space clear from active and passive smokers to support good
health
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly define your position in the introduction and restate it in the conclusion for stronger coherence.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences could be more concise to improve clarity. For example, rephrase 'is not only injuries to our health but also to the people around us' to 'is harmful not only to our health but also to those around us.'
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that the progression of ideas is logical and well-linked. Consider using more linking words and phrases to create smoother transitions between points.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples to support your viewpoints, particularly regarding health risks and the need for smoke-free environments.
task achievement
Your argumentation shows a clear understanding of the implications of smoking bans for both health and safety, which is commendable.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • second-hand smoke
  • respiratory diseases
  • healthcare costs
  • productivity
  • fire hazards
  • environmental advantages
  • aesthetics
  • non-smokers
  • personal freedom
  • well-being
  • smoking bans
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