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Some people think that men and women have different natural abilities that make them suitable for different types of work. Others, however, believe that both men and women can be equally suited to do any type of work. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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There are two groups of people having different thoughts
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work
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 in the community.
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people think
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 should
suit
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in
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 different
kind
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kinds
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 of
job
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jobs
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according to
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 their natural abilities.In fact,
fale
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males
 are more muscular and
female
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females
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 are more careful most of the time.
Forexample
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For example
, allowing men to do the
work
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 which
need
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 to carry
many
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 heavy stuff and allowing women to adjust and cut
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 clothes may be more efficient.
On the other hand
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,some people think both women and men can
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sutied
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suited
 to whatever type of
work
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 equally.In fact, the thought has
highlighed
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highlighted
 the key ideas of
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work-to
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work to
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 learn
furing
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during
 the process.Nobody could know the
work
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 very well at the
begining
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beginning
,but everyone
have
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 the ability to learn.
Therefore
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,
willing
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 to learn
in
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is
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 more important than the natural abilities you
got
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have
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.

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task achievement
Expand on your ideas and provide more detailed examples to support your arguments. This will help make your points clearer and more persuasive.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to separate your ideas into paragraphs for better clarity and readability. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly within and between these paragraphs.
task achievement
You presented both sides of the argument well, considering different perspectives on the suitability of men and women for different types of work.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction touches on the topic and presents the two views appropriately, setting the stage for discussion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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