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You are starting a new business and need to build a website. You have a friend who works for an IT company who you want to help you. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter •describe your new business •ask your friend to help you build the website •say how you will thank your friend for his/her help.

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Dear Mani, I hope you are doing well! It's been so long since we caught each other. I want some help from you, I know that you're working in one of the IT
company
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companies
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 as
a software developers
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a software developer
software developers
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. I'm going to open
clothes
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a clothes
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 shop in our
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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 but I want to put my
attires
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attire
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 on
website
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the website
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 so, everyone can buy it. I really
wants
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want
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 to make my site more attractive and different from others. I know that you're not
refuse
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refusing
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 my work even though
you've
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you have
you have got
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 a lot of work to do. Can you please make the site for me by finding time from your busy schedule
.
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 I've
a
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apply
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faith
on
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in
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 you that you do a great job. I'm really thankful to you if you do it for me. I'll not only pay you for your work but I'll
also
Linking Words
 organize
party
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a party
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 on opening day and invite you as a chef guest. I am eagerly waiting for you to meet along the site. Lots of love, Manjinder Kaur

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coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing your thoughts more clearly into distinct paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea to improve flow.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure you use appropriate linking words to connect your ideas more effectively. This can enhance the overall clarity and readability of your letter.
task achievement
Try to avoid informal phrases that may not fit the context of a request for help with a business. A slightly more formal approach could be beneficial.
task achievement
Include more specific details about your clothing business to help your friend understand its uniqueness and your vision more clearly.
tone
Your letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is great for a personal request.
content
You clearly express your appreciation for your friend's help and even offer a nice gesture in return, which adds a positive touch.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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