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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the
proportion
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 of
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added
sugar
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 consumed in four daily meals:
breakfast
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,
lunch
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,
dinner
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, and
snacks
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. These nutrients can be unhealthy if consumed in large amounts.
Overall
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,
dinner
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 contained the highest levels of
sodium
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 and saturated fat,
whereas
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snacks
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 had the greatest
proportion
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 of added
sugar
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.
To begin
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 with,
sodium
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 intake was highest at
dinner
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, accounting for 43%, followed by
lunch
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 at 29%.
In contrast
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, both
breakfast
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 and
snacks
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 contributed the least
sodium
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, each at 14%. A similar trend was observed for saturated fat, with
dinner
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 having the highest
proportion
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 (37%), followed by
lunch
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 (26%).
However
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,
snacks
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 contained 21%, which was higher than
breakfast
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 (16%). Regarding added
sugar
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,
snacks
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 had the highest percentage (42%),
while
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dinner
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 and
lunch
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 accounted for 23% and 19%, respectively.
In contrast
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,
breakfast
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 had the lowest amount of added
sugar
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, at 16%, the same as its
proportion
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 of saturated fat

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, sodium, sugar, breakfast, lunch, dinner, snacks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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