The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Bar chart illustrates
further
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education
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data among men and women pursuing part-time or full-time studies in Britain in three academic years.
Overall
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, the chart represents data of about eleven hundred
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thousands
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pupils, from 1970/71 to 1900/91 acquiring
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in
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different time constraints. It represents that part-time
education
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was more popular than full-time
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. On the one hand, male
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participants
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were 100
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thousands
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in 1970/71, which declined to 900 thousand in the second academic year, but raised again to 950
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in the third year.
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, part-time men in
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were less than 200 thousand in 1970/71 and climbed to 200 thousand in 1990/91.
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, female students started with less than 800
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in 1970/71.
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, they swiftly
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to
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more than 1000
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by 1990/91 pursuing full-time studies.
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, part-time ladies in
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took
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interest in 1970/71 by approximately 100
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; in 1990/91 it was more than 200
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