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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The
given
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maps below illustrate how the Porth Harbor has changed
during
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 more than 2 decades. The first scheme depicts the previous status of
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 area in 2000.
Second
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 one shows the condition after rebuilding. By comparing these maps certain developments are noteworthy.
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, the Main road on the West side has 3 shoulders
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 of 2 ones on the previous map. Showers and toilets zone
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 car parking on the North-West corner and parking on the South-West corner did not go through any changes.
Zone
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 with private yachts named Marina and a zone with fishing boats replaced each other.
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, near the Marina appeared one more shower and
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 location. We can observe, that on the west side of the lifeboat were built a cafe and shops.
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 radical transformation occurred in the South-East part where the Castle was, but now here are found the Hotel and a new roadway .
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Furthermore
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 the public beach became a private one, but not for hotel guests.
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 , on the North-East
side
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 a number of Docs was changed, now there are two equal ones.

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The introduction could be slightly more formal and descriptive. Try to clarify the changes by summarizing the key changes clearly in the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your comparisons in a more logical manner, perhaps categorizing them by area or type of change to improve flow.
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Provide more specific examples and clearer comparisons, especially regarding the changes in the Marina area to better illustrate the differences.
task achievement
You identified key changes and transformations in the harbour, which are important for summarizing information.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure, with distinct paragraphs for different areas of analysis, aiding readability.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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