You recently visited a public library in your town and found some facilities were not in good condition. Write a letter to the library manager. In your letter: Describe the problems you found Explain how these problems affected your visit Suggest what the library should do to improve

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my concern about the poor condition of some facilities in the library. I recently visited there, to have some peaceful environment to complete my office work. But
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noticed that the condition of
furniture
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the furniture
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was not so good, some chairs were making noise because of their poor condition.
Apart from
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this
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, Wifi is
also
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not working and when I asked
assistance
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for assistance
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from one of your
employee
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he did not
respone
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respond
response
in an appropriate way.
Due to
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these unfavourable conditions, I failed to complete my project on time, and
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had to face
conequence
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consequence
consequences
for that. because these are the basic facilities
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needed in the library. I kindly request the library management to either repair or change the old furniture,
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wifi should be working all the time so that it will be convenient for all the users. It would
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to train your employees so that they can have a
lnowledge
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knowledge
to solve customers problems.These changes will help provide a better experience for all visitors. Thank you for your attention to
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matter. I hope to see improvements soon. Yours faithfully, Raman

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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use more varied sentence structures to enhance your writing style.
Task Achievement
Make sure to proofread for small grammatical errors, such as 'i' instead of 'I' and 'respone' instead of 'response'.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider organizing your points in a clearer manner, perhaps by separating problems and suggestions into distinct paragraphs.
Task Achievement
The letter effectively communicates your concerns about the library's facilities which is important in a task response.
Task Achievement
You maintained a polite tone throughout the letter, which is appropriate for a formal request.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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