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Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests. You do NOT need to write any address.

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Dear Sir/Mam, I am writing
this
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 letter regarding
admission
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the admission
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 of my
son
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 Amandeep Singh. My Name is Rupinder Kaur. My family has decided to move from Brampton to Toronto
from
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on
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 2nd January 2026. So my
son
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 will
has
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have
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 to change his
school
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. I have searched on
search
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a search
the search
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 engine that your
school
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 is the
the
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best
school
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 in the Toronto. So, I have decided to
enroll
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 my
son
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 in your
school
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. My
Son
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 is a
brillient
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brilliant
 student. Every year, He gets
first
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the first
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 position among the class students. He
is
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is also interested
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also
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 interest in sports activities
especially
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, especially
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 Tennis. Do you have any tennis court in your
school
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?? I am looking forward
for
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to
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 your positive consideration. Yours faithfully, Rupinder Kaur.

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suitable writing tone
Try to use a more formal tone; for example, use 'I am writing to inquire' instead of 'I am writing this letter regarding' to create a better impression.
complete response
Include more details about Amandeep's academic achievements and interests to enhance the letter's depth. Highlight specific subjects he excels in and any awards he may have received.
single idea per paragraph
Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve clarity. For example, separate Amandeep's achievements and his interests into different paragraphs.
complete response
The letter effectively conveys the purpose of the request, which is to seek admission for your son, Amandeep.
suitable writing tone
It demonstrates a warm and respectful tone, which is important when making such requests.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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