The bar chart shows percentage of people in a European country going to cinemas on different days. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows percentage of people in a European country going to cinemas on different days. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates
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the percantage
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percantage
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percentage
of individuals in a European nation going to cinemas on different
days
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.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that the proportion of European individuals are mostly going to cinemas on
weekend
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weekends
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over the 3 different years. In 2003 , the highest going to
cinema
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rate
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is about 40% on
saturday
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Saturday
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. Meanwhile , on
friday
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Friday
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and
saturday
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Saturday
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rate
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the rate
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is
same
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the same
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, it is about 30%. On
monday
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Monday
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rate
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the rate
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is decreased than
other
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on other
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days
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it is about 10%.
Furthermore
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, on
tuesday
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Tuesday
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,
wednesday
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Wednesday
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and
thursday
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Thursday
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the rate's
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rate's
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rates
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are fell
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fell
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respectively. In 2005 , it is evident from the graph that the highest going to
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cinema
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the cinema
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rate
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is on
sunday
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Sundays
with 45% over the 3 years.
Moreover
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, between
thursday
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Thursday
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to
saturday
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Saturday
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cinema
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the cinema
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rate
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is
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apply
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significantly
increase
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increases
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. On
thursday
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Thursday
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going to
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cinema
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the cinema
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rate
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is lowest than
other
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on other
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days
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and years . İt is approximately 7%. In 2007 , on
friday
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Friday
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rate
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is
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apply
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remained stable in 2005 and 2003. What is more , on
weekend
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the weekend
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rate
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is increase than other
days
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. On
wednesday
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Wednesday
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going to
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cinema
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the cinema
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rate
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is decline than other
days
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. It is about 8%.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words days, cinema, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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